Marcus Camillus

[Marcus Camillus]

Name: Marcus Camillus
Age: 104
Designation: Tactical Marine

Height: 8' 2"
Hair Colour: White

Physical Description: An oddity, even among the Gene-modified Astartes, Marcus' Skin, eyes and hair are completely colourless, a strange reaction of his DNA to the introduction of the chapter Geneseed. He is blunt faced and weathered by years of war, bearing a long scar along the left side of his head, where his ear is missing. His strange lack of Pigment and Immense height make his apperance terrifying to the enemies of the Emperor and he uses this to full effect.

Marcus stands tall, erect and proud as a Space Marine should. His odd features make him difficult to read and only those closest to or perhaps the chapter librarians can truly know what he is thinking. His appearance may be unnerving but it is judged to be an asset in battle and the chapter Apothecaries have ascertained that the mutation was unlikely to recur in future generations.

Personality: Marcus is a good soldier, though somewhat arrogant. His survival in the face of impossible odds has given him a view of himself that is slightly rose-tinted. Some say that this attitude will lead to his death, others say it will lead him to acts of great heroism.

Marcus was monitored for some time after becoming a Scout as the Apothecaries debated his unusual mutation. Due to this he is less experienced than a Battle Brother of his age would usually be but he makes up for this with a natural aptitude for warfare.

When out of Duty Marcus is edgy, brooding and abrasive. However when he enters a combat situation Marcus seems to calm down, becoming relaxed, joking with his comrades and seming to generally enjoy himself. More at home in battle than out of it Marcus is slightly unbalanced and is under observation by the Chapter Librarium.

Equipment: Mk. 7 'Imperator' Armour
- Heads-Up Display (HUD)
- Proximity Detection System
- Live-Feed Tactical Pict-Caster
- Orbit Data Feed
- InterSquad Vox link w/ External Address System
- Radiation Shielding
- Anti-Flare/Sound Dampening Autosenses
- Gas/Liquid tight Envrioment Seal
- 24 Hour Air Supply
- Servo-Assisted Load Carrying
- In-Field First-Aid System (Antiseptic/Liquid Painkiller Delivery)
- Waste Reclamation and Hydration System

Mk. 5b 'Godwyn' Pattern Bolter
Combat Knife
Frag Grenades
Krak Grenades

- Personal Dataslate
- Position Marking Vox Beacons
- ChemLights
- Combat Rations
- Armour Repair Cement and Vac-Sealent
- FlexSteel Cord (100 ft) w/ Arrestor Gear and Mag-Grapple
- Grenade Dispenser
* 4x Frag
* 4x Krak
- Ammunition Dispenser
* 6x Duplus magazines
- M40 Tactical Scope

History: Marcus' recruitment was like most Marines, brutal and harrowing. After surviving the trails he entered the Scout Company. He served as a scout for many years, fighting against several enemies but most notably against the Greenskin horde of Waagh Kazrod.

During the campaign against Kazrod Marcus' squad were sent on a recon mission to search out an ork encampment. This encampment turned out to be several times larger than tactical simulations had anticipated and soon the Astartes were forced to retreat in face of an Ork warband, lacking supplies and heavy support. Marcus' squad were caught behind enemy lines.

Some weeks later the original scout force returned with reinforcements from the battle companies only to find the Orks in dissaray and easily defeated. Marcus was found to be the only member of his squad remaining, having no rations and only 4 sniper rounds remaining, his squad having slain the Ork Boss leading the warband. It was decided Marcus would join the 4th Company before they left for Armaggedon, as his experience with Orks would be most useful.

While fighting on Armaggedon Marcus proved himself as a full Battle Brother of the 4th, fighting in the hot, steamy jungle regions. His recent experiences of fighting Greenskins and scouting jungle terrain proving to be extremely usefull in the field.

Having been sent on several infiltration missions, taking out key emplacments and Ork leaders. This included the infamous warboss Narghod who was slain in combat by Marcus while his squad fought of the Boss' Nob guard. This particular acheivment was decisive in the strike force's cleansing of the region.

Unfortunatlly During an encounter with the widely feared Ork designated "Snickrot" in an unlikely ambush over half of Marcus' squad was lost and Marcus himself was gravely wounded, being removed to the Deliverance while the Apothacaries deal with the near-fatal wounds that the Ork dealt to him.

Sample Roleplay: Marcus looked around at his Brothers as they slowly stalked through the woods towards the Greenskin camp. This was where he was at home, hidden, silent, deadly. He saw Sergeant Camidus Gesturing towards a clearing ahead, using the signal language of the Astartes. {Orks Ahead}{Flank Left}. Marcus nodded and set off.

Creeping through the undergrowth Marcus took up his position to the left of the Squad. Attaching his Scope he aimed his Bolter at the clearing. As the image focused he could see several dozen Greenskins, mostly Orks. One was slightly larger than the rest, the Nob, Marcus realised. Taking aim at the Nob's head preparing for the moment of attack, he could see other Marines taking places in the woods across from him.

So brief and quiet only an Astartes could hear the Sergeant broadcast over the local comms net

++Now, Brothers.++

As soon as the command was issued Marcus depressed the trigger, the silenced shell exploding the Nob's head in a fountain of gore. Before the Orks could react Brother Avilus, armed with his flamer stepped out of the treeline, gouts of burning promethium searing the Orks to ashes. Marcus grinned as the squad opened fire on the survivors bolt shells tearing them to peices...

*

Marcus stood in the clearing, lounging against a tree. The other Marines of his squad were cleaning their weapons of the Greenskin's blood when the Sergeant spoke up.

"Alright lads, Orders just came in from the deliverance. We're to take the Greenskin base up ahead. We might encounter some resistance so be ready."

Marcus spoke up stalking over to the Sergeant, a look of fury upon his face.

"What! I saw the tactical apraissal, that base is reinforced with heavy weapons and looks big enough to hold hundreds of Orks! There's no way we can take it without support."

The sergeant looked over at him, eyes cold and calculating as if looking at a rabid dog.

"You will adress me as Sergeant, Marine! As for support that has been taken care of - the chapter would not send us needlessly to our deaths and I am not such a poor leader as to lead my men in a futile attack!"

Marcus looked down at the shorter Sergeant, considering speaking again. Instead he grudgingly nodded and replied.

"Aye sir!"

The squad set off into the forest again, an uneasy silence desending on the Marines...

[Julius Quintus]

OK, you've got a good basic concept here but it needs a lot of developement.

Firstly your appearence and personality sections are much to short. they need to be at least 2 good paragraphs each, also you might consider making his albinism a random side effect of gene-seed implantation as only physically perfect subjects are selected to become space marines and albinism is caused by a genetic defect.

Second, your history needs to be far more detailed, especially if your going for a position as a full battle brother. You should have at least 4-5 paragraphs telling you characters history from what he did to be selected through his service in the scout company and up to his recent achievements as a brother marine. If he's over 100 then he's been a full brother for a while and he fought in the armageddon war so you've got plenty of scope for heroic deeds.

Third, your sample RP is OK if a little short but we don't want to know how well you play a Space Wolf, we want to know if you can play an Omega Marine. You need to write a new sample RP based around this character.

lastly, you need to look through the standard gear list in the armoury and copy/paste the equipment list and your chosen weapon into the relevent space on your application.

Don't be discouraged by any of this, its all meant as constructive critisism. I suggest you look over some of the accepted bios in the roster thread to see what sort of things we look for before acceptance. Fix the stuff mentioned above and I'll take another look at it. Good Luck

[Marcus Camillus]

Thanks for the Advice, I am slightly confused though. If I enter as a Battle Brother do you assign me a designation (Devestator, Techmarine etc.) or do I choose? For example could I be a sergeant or would I have to be a battle brother?

[Julius Quintus]

Basically we take a look at your app and depending on the quiality of the character we either place you as a battle-brother or as a scout where you can gain some experiance and earn a place as a full brother.

As far as the designation goes, you leave it blank and we assign you a designation with a squad placement. If you have a particular place in mind just put a request in at the bottom of the application.
ATM we're looking for scouts and full brothers to fill out the first couple of squads. Once they're filled we'll start a new squad and promote someone to sergeant to command it.

[Marcus Camillus]

I see then I can only hope that by that time I will have the experience necessary to be a candidate for promotion

Anyway is this new bio more to your liking? I re-wrote the example to represent me playing as a 4th company Marine.

Now I'm gonna go see if I can get some other online Role Players to join...

[Julius Quintus]

Thats much better than it was. Deliverence gets the final word on new characters but, for me, this is more or less up to spec for a scout position. with a little more detail in the History and Sample RP sections it should be fine for a full battle-brother.

And good luck with getting more people to join, the more players we can get before we start playing missions the better. If you post an advert for the game on another site could you post a link to that site in our links page? we don't want to get a bad rep for spamming other peoples boards.

[Marcus Camillus]

I've added something to the Bio and shall add more soon - I would really prefer not to have to be a scout as I'm quite an experienced PbP Role Player.

Oh and I added the B&C to the links.

[Julius Quintus]

Looks good. As I said the final descision is Deliverences but I don't have a problem with accepting you as a battle-brother.

Nice avatar pic BTW

[Marcus Camillus]

I would just like to add that I would prefer to be an Assualt Marine (seems to fit the character) but if you need Battle Brothers I would be fine with that too. Perhaps I could be a Tactical Marine and be transfered to an assualt Squad when there are more members?

[Julius Quintus]

ATM we're trying to get together enough players to fill out a full tactical squad. Once we've got that far we'll look at assault and devastator units. I'm sure we can redeploy you when we have enough guys for an assault squad. If you play well you may even get to command it.

[Rallus Zenodius]

Accepted with the Rank of Battle Brother.

Assigned to Tactical Squad one. Under Brother Sergeant Manius Agrippa. Strike Force Alpha.

Zeal is it's own excuse

[Manius Agrippa]

Well come to 1st tactical Squad Brother Camillus - do not hesitate to contact me should you wish to seek my council - or indeed to offer me some of your own.