Magnus Calpurnius

[Magnus Calpurnius]

Ok, first off I'm rather new to all this but I tried my best lol.

Name: Magnus Calpurnius
Age: 32
Designation: Scout

Height: 7 feet.
Hair Colour: brown.

Physical Description: Much like most new neophytes, Magnus is tall, muscular and just growing out of the last vestiges of youth. As a child he underwent the initiation ceremonies of his home world, this involves extensive scarring to the face and arms, and he bears these with pride. His hair is cut short so as to avoid becoming a nuisance in battle, and he remains clean shaven. He has deep blue eyes that give the impression that he is able to look in to your very soul, though this is of course ridiculous as he is not a psykers.

Personality: Known as one of the more sensible neophytes, Magnus is not one for jokes and games, he prefers to keep himself to himself. Nevertheless he is a good soldier, he’ll follow any order no matter how immoral, and is happy to do his duty in the name of the Emperor. He is neither arrogant or humble, he is simply a man doing what he can with his life. The fact that he was skilled enough to be accepted in to the Omega Marines, while obviously a great honour, has done nothing to boost his ego. His home world believes that the Emperor guides every action a person makes, and so no matter what he does he is unlikely to take any real credit for it.

Equipment:
Scout Armour
- Left/Right Eye-HUD w/ Image Enhancement
- Live-Feed Tactical Pict-Caster
- InterSquad Vox Link
- Orbital Data Feed
- In-Field First-Aid System (Antiseptic/Liquid Painkiller Delivery)
- Waste Reclamation and Hydration System

Weapons:
Mk. 5b 'Godwyn' Pattern Bolter
Combat Knife
Frag Grenades
Krak Grenades

Standard Scout Equipment
- Personal Dataslate
- Rebreather Mask w/ 6 Hour Air Supply
- Dust Goggles / UV Protected, Non-Reflective Surface
- Position Marking Vox Beacons
- ChemLights
- Combat Rations
- FlexSteel Cord (100 ft) w/ Arrestor Gear and Mag-Grapple
- Grenade Bandolier
* 4x Frag
* 4x Krak
- Ammunition Pouches
*10x Sickle magazines


History: Like most applicants to space marine chapters, Magnus grew up on a harsh world. It was a heavily forested planet known mainly for the barbarian tribes inhabiting it’s southern most continent. It was to one of these tribes that Magnus was born. Even as a young child it was clear he was a great warrior, easily passing all the rituals and tests his tribe demanded of him, including the slaying of one of the great lion like beasts that prowl the jungles.

Soon, the Omega Marines came to his planet, immediately recognising the potential in him they took him away and began the process of turning him in to a space marine. He took to his new fate well, quickly learning the ways of the space marine, and soon showing an aptitude for long ranged warfare.

His first mission once he has received the black carapace was to assassinate a rebel guard captain who had taken his regiment with him to the worship of Chaos. This was no problem for Magnus, it took him less than a day to complete his mission despite being on his own and with limited ammo after his squad were ambushed upon insertion to the planet.

Since then he has performed his duties admirably and the commanders of the Omega Marines have high hopes for the young man.

Sample Roleplay:
It was cold, not that this bothered Magnus, he was used to the cold, he simply found it odd that a desert planet would be cold in the daytime. Still, this planet was ruled by Chaos, he had to expect the unexpected.

He had been on this Emperor forsaken planet for four hours now and was no closer to his target, and for the first time in his life he felt alone. His squad mates, men he had trained with, had all been killed on insertion. d**n those renegades. He thought, I will kill that captain.

His gun was damaged, he’d need to fix it before he could do anything. You couldn’t kill a heretic with a broken gun, no matter how much you wanted to. But first he needed somewhere safe.

He looked around, this planet had little in the way of cover. I hate deserts. There was a cave about 2 kilometres north-west. Well, it was his best option. It was his only option. He set out, constantly on the lookout for sentries, he had no idea where the rebel camp was and didn’t really want to get caught with a broken gun and some shrapnel in his leg.

“Finally.” He said, when he made it to the cave. It was a big cave. Just big enough to hold a predator. He thought. Not that I have any other options. He finished as he entered the cave, his bolt pistol ready.




Yeah, the sample role play isn't great, but every other time I tried this stuff (which is like 4 times total) I always did it kind of reactively to what other people posted, so writing one with nothing else there was rather hard. Anyway, I really would appreciate any help you could give me.

[Julius Quintus]

I have trouble writing sample RPs too, its something you get better at with practice.

Inexperiance isn't much of an obstacle in our game, thats why we have a scout contingent. Anyone who shows promise can be inducted to the scout squad and learn the ropes IC and OOC until they're ready to be promoted to full battle-brother.

As for your app. Its quite good, better than my first attempt at a PbP character anyway.
The first half of the app is fine but your history needs some serious work.

First off, its too short, you need a lot more detail. Try adding something about how your character was noticed as exceptional by the visiting marines.

Second, Astartes don't tend to get sent on assassination mission, the Imperium has the Officio Assassinorum for that. Surviving behind enemy lines when your squad is dead is fine though. Try changing the setting to the Third Armageddon War its been established that the chapters scout company was deployed behind enemy lines for most of the war.

Third, your Sample RP needs some work. As I said above, the subject matter needs soome tweaking and the whole thing needs some more descriptive detail. You'll spend a good deal of time in combat in this RP so it would be good if your sample included some action.

A final note, your avatar is extremely cool but you might want to look for a pic that actually shows your characters face rather than his back.

Take your time with the modifacations and do the best job you can and I can't see any reason why you wouldn't be accepted.

[Magnus Calpurnius]

Thanks, I've done a bit of work on it, but it's late, so I'll finish it up and post it tomorrow. Thanks again In the meantime, where are you all getting those really cool avatars? I can't find a good one.

Also, trying to write this stuff with a broken space bar is hard

[Julius Quintus]

I can't speak for the oothers but I just used Google image search to find a cool pic and then used Photoshop to crop it to size.

[Magnus Calpurnius]

OK I've edited the history, sample RP and got myself a new avatar (you'll just have to pretend he has hair).

Name: Magnus Calpurnius
Age: 32
Designation:

Height: 7 foot, dead on.
Hair Colour: brown.

Physical Description: Much like most new neophytes, Magnus is tall, muscular and just growing out of the last vestiges of youth. As a child he underwent the initiation ceremonies of his home world, this involves extensive scarring to the face and arms, and he bears these with pride. His hair is cut short so as to avoid becoming a nuisance in battle, and he remains clean shaven. He has deep blue eyes that give the impression that he is able to look in to your very soul, though this is of course ridiculous as he is not a psyker.

Personality: Known as one of the more sensible neophytes, Magnus is not one for jokes and games, he prefers to keep himself to himself. Nevertheless he is a good soldier, he’ll follow any order no matter how immoral, and is happy to do his duty in the name of the Emperor. He is neither arrogant or humble, he is simply a man doing what he can with his life. The fact that he was skilled enough to be accepted in to the Omega Marines, while obviously a great honour, has done nothing to boost his ego. His home world believes that the Emperor guides every action a person makes, and so no matter what he does he is unlikely to take any real credit for it.

Equipment:
Scout Armour
- Left/Right Eye-HUD w/ Image Enhancement
- Live-Feed Tactical Pict-Caster
- InterSquad Vox Link
- Orbital Data Feed
- In-Field First-Aid System (Antiseptic/Liquid Painkiller Delivery)
- Waste Reclamation and Hydration System

Weapons:
Mk. 5b 'Godwyn' Pattern Bolter
Combat Knife
Frag Grenades
Krak Grenades

Standard Scout Equipment
- Personal Dataslate
- Rebreather Mask w/ 6 Hour Air Supply
- Dust Goggles / UV Protected, Non-Reflective Surface
- Position Marking Vox Beacons
- ChemLights
- Combat Rations
- FlexSteel Cord (100 ft) w/ Arrestor Gear and Mag-Grapple
- Grenade Bandolier
* 4x Frag
* 4x Krak
- Ammunition Pouches
* 10x Sickle magazines


History: Like most applicants to space marine chapters, Magnus grew up on a harsh world. It was a heavily forested planet known mainly for the barbarian tribes inhabiting it’s southern most continent. It was to one of these tribes that Magnus was born. Even as a young child it was clear he was a great warrior, easily passing all the rituals and tests his tribe demanded of him, including the slaying of one of the great lion like beasts that prowl the jungles.

Soon, the Omega Marines came to his planet, immediately recognising the potential in him they took him away and began the process of turning him in to a space marine. When they first found he was undergoing the rite of Malhorach, a vicious trial among his people in which he has to spend four weeks living alone in the forests with only a knife to aid him. Many perished during this rite, as the forests were not a friendly place.
Nevertheless, he excelled, easily hunting the larger creatures for food and making himself temporary shelters for protection each night. The Omega Marines had seen his skill one day while he was hunting by chance, and had kept an eye on him since. It didn’t take long for them to recruit him.

He took to his new fate well, quickly learning the ways of the space marine, and soon showing an aptitude for long ranged warfare. Often taking out targets at ranges his squad mates couldn’t even see to.

His first combat experience was on Armageddon against the ork hordes. He spent a lot of time behind enemy lines on recon and sabotage missions. He took to this work like a fish to water and had soon made a name for himself as a loyal and capable soldier.

At one point he ended up behind enemy lines alone when his squads thunderhawk was shot down. However, he quickly re-established contact with his commanders and it was decided that he would destroy a nearby weapons cache with the demo-charges he had scavenged from the wreckage of the thunderhawk. It took him an admirably short amount of time.

Since then he has performed his duties admirably and the commanders of the Omega Marines have high hopes for the young man.

Sample Roleplay:
The crash had been…uncomfortable, to say the least. His squad were dead, and he was alone. Still, he had managed to make contact with his commander and had new orders, so at least he had direction.

He had been ordered to destroy a weapons cache nearby, however it was surrounded by orks, and he had only his sniper rifle, a combat knife, four frags and some demo-charges, hardly suitable weaponry to assault an enemy encampment. He’d be d**ned if he didn’t try though, no way was he letting the captain down.

+The camp is one point four kilometres to the east.+ The captains voice said over the vox. Sending a confirmation, he set off. One point four kilometres of forest? Not a problem for a marine, even a scout. Magnus actually liked forests, they reminded him of home, of course “home” was a deathworld on the fringes of Imperial space, but it was still home.

The orks had control of this area of the planet, so he had to be careful, always on the lookout for sentries and patrols. Several times he nearly got caught, though his camouflage enabled him Magnus to remain hidden. Even so, he was forced to kill a few of the orks when he was spotted, thankfully none of them were able to raise an alarm. His blade was covered in ork blood though, and he had no way to clean it effectively. He couldn’t simply run it through the grass, it was too sharp for that, he’d just leave a gouge in the ground.



A little over an hour later, he made it to the enemy camp. He could see the weapons cache, it was little more than a pile of guns and ammunition, although this was hardly surprising as orks weren’t exactly known for their love of aesthetics. There were two guards, one small ork with a shoota, and a larger one, probably a nob, with a slugga and a large choppa.

He had two options, he could either kill the nob with a sniper round and hope he could take the smaller one in combat without drawing attention, or he could sneak around the back. A part of him wanted to kill the nob, to feel the thrill of combat again, but he knew he wouldn’t be able to kill both orks without attracting a crowd of other orks.

It would be difficult to sneak in, the back was fenced off, and he’d need to scale it without making any noise, he needed a distraction. Formulating a plan, he set off in the opposite direction to the weapons cache.

About twenty metres away, he placed one of his demo charges on the ground, and set it for a two minute delay, hoping it would be long enough. Back at the fence, he simply had to wait for it to go off.

When it did, both orks ran off towards the ruckus, probably hoping it meant there was a fight to be had, not that Magnus cared what the reason was, he had a job to do. Scaling the fence, he placed his three remaining demo-charges in suitable places, giving each a two minute delay, just like the first one. It was time to leave, the orks were still busy inspecting the disturbance, so it was a simple matter of getting over the fence and getting back to friendly forces.

He ran, listening to the satisfying boom of the explosion and the roars of the orks two minutes later.

[Julius Quintus]

I've just been informed that I can accept people on my own, which is cool so...

Bio Accepted

You have the rank of Scout-Novice in the 1st scout squad under my command.

Amend your signiture to look like mine with the template and gifs here
you can begin role-playing with the other members in any part of the Deliverence except the Deployment Room which currently being used for a command briefing.

Welcome to the Omega Marines